Wednesday, January 20, 2016

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beneath the black tree in the forest there is the part of the chimney that remained.
what housed the fire to safely burn is all that is left after the fire burned the house.

once there was a wind that blew in a circle. everything was pulled in and went around & round.
a black beetle tried to crawl in under the screen door. the wind tunneled over and sucked the beetle in.
the beetle was very small and the wind-circle very large. aided by trauma, time slowed down. the beetle lived many years in the circle of wind. though minutes later, rain came and stopped it all.
in the wind
the beetle met a butterfly. the butterfly was in bed.

i was asleep when the storm hit :said the butterfly

i'm tired :said the beetle

sit on my bed and rest a while :said the butterfly

the beetle crawled into bed.
the beetle and the butterfly fell in love.
later, the butterfly lay too precariously in the bed and the wind took her away.

why was time not slow for her? :thought the beetle

the beetle then realized he had only heard a buzzing when she spoke. and he had made up all the words she said.
time was only slow for the beetle.



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4 comments:

  1. this is a awesome alligatory. I am not a very good writer but I'd really like to understand how you put together this paragraph:
    beneath the black tree in the forest there is the part of the chimney that remained.
    what housed the fire to safely burn is all that is left after the fire burned the house.
    What is such a bold choice of words that really hits me and sets up this entire piece. Do you feel like you are saying F*ck you grammer? or just speaking from your heart?

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    1. Haha, wow. Um, hm...i had to think about your question for a minute. I'm not entirely sure what is grammatically incorrect about your example, although i know it's entirely structurally incorrect. Maybe "is" should have been "was" or "remained" should have been "remains". I suppose when i am in a writing space of this type of story telling, the story kind of comes from another place and i'm not really thinking about it. I word it how it feels right. Sort of. I'm trying to give you an answer that isn't too wordy, which i think i'm failing at...

      Ok, i think in pictures. All my thoughts come in a serious of colours and shapes and images. When i am attempting to communicate with others i work hard at translating the pictures in the best way possible to get my meaning across to the other person in a way he or she will understand, in the way i intend for them to understand it. That can be rather exhausting.
      When i short-short-story-write or prose-write, i turn my inner translator down and allow my thoughts to take the shortest route possible to the words. So i'm not exactly speaking from my heart or trying to get any specific message across. I'm just putting down what's at the top of my head as directly as possible. I suppose.

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  2. I was in some serious morning for my bicycle yesterday so I probably used stronger language than I intended. But I do feel like the words you use are defiant in a very positive way. You say you think in pictures but those pictures are definitely moving in a way that challenges a reader to keep up, and go back and start over. short-short story is a good medium for such.

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  3. Don't stop writing.

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